FREE REFLECTION TASK
Today I am gonna share a free reflection of an article. I read this article about two weeks ago, and I have comments on this article. Now let's start!
My Reflection
This article is about ten most deadly unnatural disasters. I searched these disasters for my friend’s
homework and I learned a lot of things that I didn’t know before. They were explosions, fires, and mining accidents. All of these disasters
occured as a result of man-made mistakes,
and they had irreversible places in history. As I understand during the
World War 2 countries and people did terrible things without thinking
humanity, and just for
their benefits. There was so much information with numbers so
this makes article a little hard, but with these datas we can understand how important these events
and how their result are horrible
because their death rates
are so high. I think the most interesting one is Church of Company Fire because people had
panic in fire that’s why
more people died.
Even today disasters as big as
these can occur around
the world, so people should be more careful and cautios
and additionaly in the event of
such things countries should be
more helpful to one another.
YES PEACE, NO WAR !
Dear Tuğçe,
YanıtlaSilI enjoyed reading your writing. It is really well prepared. You provided your opinion clearly. However, your majors and minors are not clear. There are some problems in organization. For example, there is no concluding sentence. I think you should have provided your concluding sentence and specific transitions or connectors to make you majors and minors clearer. Your ideas are connected to each other. There are small punctuation mistakes. You should add a comma after connectors. I think you forgot to add them. I cannot see any mistakes other than these small ones. If you check your writing and correct these mistakes, Your writing will be very good. Thank you for writing it.
Best.
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YanıtlaSilHey dude!!
YanıtlaSilI am here to make a comment on your writing xd. Firstly, I want to say I really like your blog. You know, I always like your humour style and as far as I see you are reflecting this style on yor blog, too and that is amazing!! I liked your writing about disasters as you said they are very impressive for us, people and it is a good topic to choose. Congratz buddy!! A purple heart for you, you know..
Hello Tu-çeey. My grade for your writing task is 90 out of 100. I am not giving you the last 10 points because you did not write a summary of the article. I did not read the article but I am curious. But I don't have time. You should've explained or given a summary. Anyway congratulations on having nice wishes about peace. I also liked your serious cat.
YanıtlaSilHi Tuğçe!
YanıtlaSilAybüke is next you again, as always! :D
If you were in Nur Hoca's section, she might have given you a not-so-good mark and you could understand what we experienced in whole term.. Okay bud, your connectors and the way you write are good. In a reflection, you should have a concluding sentence because it is very important. Moreover, you should be careful about the punctuations used after connectors. All in all, I liked your paragraph except for some little tiny mistakes. ^^